How's this for an entrance beginning for a Novel?

[Basra-]

Love is not love If you are out there actively seeking It. Love is surreptitious, its serendipitous, it is chance happenstance, when you least expect it, it finds you. Qora Darood is a beautiful single and available heroine of the abgaale tribe. A week ago she received a dire letter begging her to come home in rural, England to help her brother recuperate from a heart attack. Her brother Arman was a jovial, obese soul who loved food just as much as she did, but he took it to another level. Upon arriving home, she was struck my familiar, nostalgic feeling of lost. A childhood spent home, in lonely days and happy days. The rain pouring did not help to elevate the mood into disinclinations and discomforts. At least, her thoughts were occupied on her brother, who had bouts of screaming in the middle of the night when suddenly he wakes up, feeling he cant breath. He would run around the home screaming from breath upon experiencing a brief, stink of sleep paralysis.

[LMFAOO]

[qoraxeey]

Basra you are a fat qumaayo ..why do U wish death upon my only brother

[LMFAOO]

Naa Basra, you need to finish the novel.I would read it walleh.

[Jabuutawi]

Since I have a "Ph.D." in English I thought I might comment on your post.

- Some grammatical and spelling errors -- not a big deal but it should be fixed.
- I don't see direct connection between what love is and her sickly brother.
- Revisit your punctuation marks.
- "but he took it to another level", sounds "ghetto".

Write legal thrillers and I will read your novels. Love and women stuff, nah.

[thehappyone]

Love is not love If you are out there actively seeking It. Love is surreptitious, its serendipitous, it is chance happenstance

does your novel come with a dictionary

[Basra-]

Since I have a "Ph.D." in English I thought I might comment on your post.

- Some grammatical and spelling errors -- not a big deal but it should be fixed.
- I don't see direct connection between what love is and her sickly brother.
- Revisit your punctuation marks.
- "but he took it to another level", sounds "ghetto".

Write legal thrillers and I will read your novels. Love and women stuff, nah.

Jabuutawa@Loooooooooooooooool

I will take your advice into consideration. Legal thrillers sounds good. Right now I am reading a book about the 9 US Supreme Court Justices


LMFAOO

LOOL u r too cute.


Qora sorry darling.


thehappyone

u can go to dictionary.com lol but too cute too.